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Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?

These days, the number of various
animal
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 species are decreasing. Some species are nearly endangered. and others are
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 in the same situation.
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 essay will discuss the major roots of
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 problem and some practical solutions. One of the main causes is that there are many
illegel
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illegal
 trading of
animals
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 in the black market around the world.
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 is because the more exotic
animals
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, the more expensive cost.
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, many hunters try to hunt endangered species for selling to
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rich buyers. In order to tackle
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 problem, governments should protect these
animals
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 from extinction.
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, they could do
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 by implementing a law to prevent these
illegel
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illegal
 activities. Another obvious concern is that animal habitats are disrupted. To explain, people destroy
environment
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 for several reasons.
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, we cut down a number of trees to expand cities.
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 it is important to economic growth, these activities have negative effects
to
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animals
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. They lose their houses and
foods
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food
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. One effective solution is for governments to control
man made
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 constructions which not allow them to affect
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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.
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,
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 could be done by setting high rate taxes.
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, the elimination of animal
habitat
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habitats
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would decline. In conclusion,
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 essay examines two issues leading to
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animal extinction; (1)
an
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illegal trading and (2)
a
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animal habitat disruption. As far as I am concern, I strongly believe that governments should play an important role to force a proper law and levy on constructions taxes to protect our
animals
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 in the future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • species extinction
  • endangered animals
  • biodiversity
  • habitat loss
  • deforestation
  • urbanization
  • poaching
  • illegal wildlife trade
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • conservation efforts
  • legislation
  • enforcement
  • human overpopulation
  • sustainable development
  • responsible consumption
  • education
  • awareness programs
  • protected areas
  • wildlife reserves
  • international cooperation
  • collaboration
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