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Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In schools, apart from teaching academic courses, there should be some importance given towards teaching personality development methods as well. One
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how to be a good
parent
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 from
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 age and I certainly agree with
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 approach. A person till he
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 a grown adult , spend most of the time in educational institutions and here is where he learns various skills required to be a successful individual. So, it is advisable to teach the student about parenting at
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 step, which helps them to inculcate good manners and ethical values in
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, learning about various hurdles that a
parent
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 goes through to nurture them can elevate the respect towards their parents.
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, when a
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 says something against their wishes ,
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 of acting foolishly, youngsters will start to take their parents' decision in a sensible way and understand their intention
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 creating a healthy relationship with them.
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 to the above point, having
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 experience helps
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young people when they become a
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. The knowledge that they gained about parenting, helps them to anticipate the behaviour of their kids and troubles they can create in certain situations.
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,
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 them to tackle those situations in a better way. In conclusion, teaching a kid about the skills to become a good
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 is absolutely necessary and it helps them to handle situations in the current
life
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 or future
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 in a sensible way.
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,
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 learning program should start from
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 young age as
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 is the time a child's perception towards
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 commences.
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