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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam' How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars

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Over the past three decades, the number of private
cars
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 on the roads has skyrocketed in various capital cities all over the world, which results in
the
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massive
traffic
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jam
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. As being a driver in Bangkok, Thailand, I strongly agree with
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.
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,
this
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 essay will examine the effective measures that the government should implement for encouraging
people
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 to less
use
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their
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cars
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. Nowadays,
people
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 are prone to travel and commute by private
cars
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 than public transport due to its convenience, and affordable prices. For
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 reason, the road
are
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 full
with
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the
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cars
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, and eventually one big
traffic
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jam
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. The Phahonyothin road can be a good example to illustrate the definition of
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car
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a car
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jam
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. Obviously, you need to spend at least a
hours
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hour
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to travel
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traveling
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 just 10
kilometers
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kilometres
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 through
this
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 road.
Someone
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Some
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 believe that it is faster to travel by
bicycles
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bicycle
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.
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, the aforementioned evidence indicates that the
traffic
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jam
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 is real, and being
a
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trouble, that the government should make the solutions to it. One of the promising measures for ameliorating the vast majority of
cars
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, and enabling to lure
people
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 to reduce the
car
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use
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includes
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 increasing taxes on fuel and the
car
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 prices, and improving public transport.
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, higher
price
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prices
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 for fuel and
cars
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 discourage citizens to buy
cars
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 because
with
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 the higher outcome,
people
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 prefer to save
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money and take
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alternative options for transportation
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 why the government should enhance the quality of public transports including buses, trains, and vans.
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, they should increase the train station in every
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, and small
cities
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city
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the traveling
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traveling
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travelling
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 of citizens. Since its more convenient and less money
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spend
spended
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spent
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,
people
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 turn to
use
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 more public
transpots
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transport
transports
 and
use
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 less private
cars
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. In summary, recently, numerous cities across the world have faced
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 drastic increase in
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private
cars
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 resulting in
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traffic
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a traffic
the traffic
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jam
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jams
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.
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, rising
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fuel and
car
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price
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prices
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 and public
transpot
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transport
 enhancement can be successful measures to mitigate the problem of
traffic
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 jams.
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