A local annual festival will take place in your area soon. Write a letter to the organiser of the festival. In your letter –Provide feedback on the festival held last year. –Offer some help with organisation of this year’s festival –Inquire about specific details or features of the upcoming festival
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Dear Sir,
I am writing
this
letter regarding the upcoming annual local games festival in our area. I found that this
festival is being organised by your Sunpharma Company.
At the onset, let me apprise you with the feedback on last
year
’s festival, which was a great success. Where children were so glad due to
many playful activities, adults were excited to show their talents in the local talent hunt show and the prize for the winner was $10000.
Further
, our volunteering team of 40 members helped in the car parking last
year
and everybody praised a lot about our work. This
year
, if you allow us to impart our identical duties this
year
, our team will be happy to work without any cost for the best parking arrangements.
Lastly
, I would like to inquire about some details for this
upcoming event. Though like every year
it is a festival to present our community culture, I want to know this
year
’s theme for it along with
a special event like a talent hunt. Moreover
, send some details about the setup of this
festival, which will help us to plan parking areas according.
Thanking you in anticipation.
Yours faithfully,
Jacob Brown.Submitted by Mrjit147 on
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task achievement
Provide a little more detail on how the festival could be improved based on last year's experience. This will help to better fulfill the 'task response' criterion.
coherence cohesion
Try to make the transitions between paragraphs smoother. This would enhance the logical flow of the letter.
task achievement
The letter is highly respectful and maintains a suitable tone throughout, which is crucial for formal correspondence.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are perfectly executed, making it professional.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite