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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Construction of new railway lines for fast
trains
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 between towns, many
people
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 think it worth to spending large sums of money to develop public transportation and some
people
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 believe that it is unnecessary to spend on other public transport. In
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 I will discuss both views and give my opinion.
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 with, travel by fast
trains
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 between cities has become popular in many countries around the world. In 2020 China launched a brand new fast
train
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 line and now it is the fastest
train
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 in the world,
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moreover
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 Elon Musk doing the fast
train
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 called
Hyper loop
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Hyperloop
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, he claimed that
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 is the fastest
train
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 in the
next
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 few years. By the way, travelling by high-speed
train
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 will make a
lot
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 of profit in each area.
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, more jobs for upcountry that lead to
people
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 around the station in upcountry will have a job and tourism could be easy to access.
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, investment in high-speed
trains
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 will gain a
lot
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 of benefits for
people
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 and to cities.
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, improving other public transport is very necessary as well,
such
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 as bus,van or even air-plane all of
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 will be making a profit to the country a
lot
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.
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, buses will transfer
people
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 to the city and
air-planes
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aeroplanes
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 will fly between countries.
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, apart from high-speed
trains
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, buses and air-planes will give a
lot
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 of benefits not only
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people
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 in their country
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 but
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 to tourism from overseas. In conclusion, I would say every public transportation is vital for driving the country and their citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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