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Some people think that companies should provide employees with exercise time during the day. What is your opinion about this?

#people #companies #employees #exercise #time
Exercise
 leads to a better life. I believed companies should provide
exercise
 time to their respective employees
everyday
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. It can help them to be productive and improve their mental and physical health before starting the day. On the one hand, being productive at
work
 helps the company to
finished
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 all the things on time.
Also
, our brain will function. Exercising before
work
 gives a lot of advantages.
For example
, if you're sleepy and lazy to
work
,
exercise
 can help us to function properly.
Secondly
, it can motivate us to be more reliable to
work
.
On the other hand
, it improved our mental and physical health, because when working we need to think a lot of ideas and how to build better
result
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results
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 for the company. With that, our boss can commend us
by
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for
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 doing that.
Additionally
,
exercise
have
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has
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 an important role in our lives not just helping us
about
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with
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work
 but
also
 for our health. Most
of
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people
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the people
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 working in
a corporate sectors
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corporate sectors
a corporate sector
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 were
they
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apply
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just sitting in
an ergonomic chairs
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an ergonomic chair
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 without moving the whole day.
Exercise
 will be helpful for them to start up
work
, and
also
 they
atleast
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at least
 moved their bodies. To sum up, I firmly believe that
exercise
have
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 a great contribution to our life.
Finally
, all of us should
atleast
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at least
 do
exercise
 every day not just to stay healthy but to be more productive and improved our skills.
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