Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do to try and have a satisfying working life?

Some people believe that choosing a
job
at an early age for our
future
to pursue and keep trying to achieve it can increase
job
satisfaction in our
future
life
. While I accept that being happy in our
job
depends on several factors, I believe that deciding
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job
at an early age paves the way
of
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satisfying
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work
life
. On one hand, people believe that choosing a
job
at juvenile or childhood is more beneficial for several reasons.
First
, we can find an appropriate
job
for our
future
life
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depend on our abilities and emotions. Finding our emotions and abilities need
time
and we cannot decide our
future
job
in short
time
periods because it’s
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process.
Second
, there is enough
time
for us to search and read about jobs and choose our
future
job
,
then
try to get university qualifications in that field.
For example
, if you want to be an engineer, you have to attend university courses which
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at least 4 years.
On the other hand
, it is argued that our early age decision about
job
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can not lead to
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happy
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life
for some reasons. Choosing
appropriate
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profession is an important part of our
life
which needs wise
decision
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which cannot happen
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early
ages
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.
In addition
, the expectation of children about their
future
job
will not happen most of the
time
because they just think about adrenaline works
such
as astronaut and teenagers often think about jobs with high incomes
such
as
:
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soccer player, doctor, … . To sum up, I partly agree with the idea that choosing a
job
in adolescence can bring happiness
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our
future
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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