Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do to try and have a satisfying working life?

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Some people believe that choosing a

job

at an early age for our

future

to pursue and keep trying to achieve it can increase

job

satisfaction in our

future

life

. While I accept that being happy in our

job

depends on several factors, I believe that deciding

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job

at an early age paves the way

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for

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satisfying

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work

life

. On one hand, people believe that choosing a

job

at juvenile or childhood is more beneficial for several reasons.

First

, we can find an appropriate

job

for our

future

life

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depend on our abilities and emotions. Finding our emotions and abilities need

time

and we cannot decide our

future

job

in short

time

periods because it’s

complicated

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process.

Second

, there is enough

time

for us to search and read about jobs and choose our

future

job

then

try to get university qualifications in that field.

For example

, if you want to be an engineer, you have to attend university courses which

takes

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at least 4 years.

On the other hand

, it is argued that our early age decision about

job

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the job

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can not lead to

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happy

work

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work-life

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life

for some reasons. Choosing

appropriate

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an appropriate

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profession is an important part of our

life

which needs wise

decision

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which cannot happen

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at in

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early

ages

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In addition

, the expectation of children about their

future

job

will not happen most of the

time

because they just think about adrenaline works

such

as astronaut and teenagers often think about jobs with high incomes

such

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soccer player, doctor, … . To sum up, I partly agree with the idea that choosing a

job

in adolescence can bring happiness

for

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our

future

life

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

276 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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