Nowadays television and the Internet have a greater influence on children's behaviour than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days,
TV
and the Internet are essential factors associated with everyone's life.
Moreover
, kids' conduct is influenced by them more than their family. From my point of view, I agree with
this
statement because their parents are busy throughout the day, and television and websites have interesting programs.
Firstly
, the primary reason why I agree with it is today mother and father have to work outside,
therefore
several children have to live alone when they are finishing their studies.
As a result
, they usually spend their leisure time with
TV
and the internet.
Thus
, kids' behaviour will be influenced by them. My friend's son,
for instance
, lives with their parents but both of them work from Monday to Saturday from 8 a.m. to 6 p.m. He usually lives alone on Saturday, and Youtube is his choice to spend time with. His conduct slowly changes to be an aggressive child. As my friend said, she believes her son take action as one of the characters on Youtube which he watched. The
second
reason is children think
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television's programs and media
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websites are interesting.
Hence
, they make the kids who usually watched them believe these are appropriate behaviour.
For example
, my niece
stay
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with her father who is my uncle. He told me that his
daughter
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like to watch the ADE drama on
TV
and the Tiktok. After that, she often
do
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like the
tiktoker
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TikTok
or
have
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some
conducts
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as
main
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actress in the drama. She said she
consider
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it is a
delighted
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thing because it is funny and several people like them
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her. To sum up, television and websites influence children's
behavior
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behaviour
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more than their
family
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families
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. I agree with it because their parents have to work outside
everyday
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, and information from both
TV
and the internet are more
encorage
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encourage
them.
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