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Some people say that ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A segment of society holds a viewpoint that with the stride in technology the magazines and newspapers will be replaced by the electronic version of
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textbook
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. Personally, I am highly inclined towards
this
 view due to certain reasons coupled with some reservations which will be discussed in
this
 essay. Certainly,
with
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the advancement of sophisticated technological gadgets and their easy procurement is one of the primary reasons for the widespread trend of
latest
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 technology. Another cause for their publicity is that individuals can have access to the reading articles in their comfort zone at any time despite the place.
As a result
 of
this
, masses have knowledge of recent national and international news
alongwith
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along with
 the native one .
For instance
; in case of a natural calamity like
earthquake
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 approaching a specific area information is broadcasted to inhabitants swiftly through these modes.
Thus
, the instant updates of events are possible due to modern modes
such
 as television and radio. Adding to
this
, the material available on
internet
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 is one of the possible
solution
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 to cumbersome the issue of waste material pollution as manufacturing of newspapers and magazines require
a tonnes
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tonnes
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 of paper and water.
Moreover
, soft copies are inexpensive
in contrast
 to
the
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hard copy.
On the contrary
, in school academic curriculum to enhance the reading skills of pupils these previous methods are incorporated. To illustrate; a survey carried out by eminent environmentalist
Dr.
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 Thomas reveals that press material
contribute
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 to 28%
water
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 pollution.
Hence
, to curb the menace of deforestation switching on to electronic mode is a tiny step towards
environment
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 protection. In compendium, I reiterate that the growth of technology would definitely hamper the sale of press material but it cannot obsolete
this
 method due to its advantages
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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