Unmanned vehicles will become more and more popular in the future. Passengers travelling inside these robot cars will be only human. Do you think the benefits of these surpass the drawbacks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

We are living in the 4th Industrial Revolution. Unmanned vehicles will become more and more popular in the future.
Human
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will be able to use these robot cars. With the
technology
evolution, I think the benefits of
this
can’t surpass the drawbacks. With
technology
,
driverless
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vehicle
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will be programmed so
it
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can help us to prevent
from
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accidents or traffic jams. It can help
human
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a lot in daily life.
Although
there are many advantages,
driverless
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vehicle
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still
have
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many problems.
This
kind of
vehicle
is using
technology
so its problems can
also
come from
technology
. Any electrical machine will be broken so the driverless
vehicle
can be broken will driving human and it can cause a dangerous accident. Probably, the
vehicle
can be hacked.
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can access
to
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the whole system and it can be
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big trouble for the community safety.
Last
but not least,
this
can be a problem with
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connection because when
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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