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Write an essay of at least 250 words to describe a sports player you like most

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It has been years since I started watching the National Basketball Association (
NBA
) basketball championship, but the one who stands out the most is Wardell Stephen “Steph” Curry II. The
first
time
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 saw him was in a short video on Facebook when his team-Golden State Warriors met Cleveland Cavaliers in 2016. The game was fascinating and what Steph did there was something I have not seen before. Shoots after shoots, that’s why people call him the greatest 3-point shooter in history. Normally, other players in the association are very tall and muscular in order to maximize their strength and durability . But Curry’s case was different, he is only 1.91m and has a slim body which is why we often see him fail his dunks. He has very typical African-American identifications
such
 as wavy hair, brown complexion and
also
 unique ones like his beard and
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 and his beautiful eyes which have “Keratoconus”, a disease that impaired his vision. In return for his unfortunate physical appearance, his phenomenal talent for shooting ranged shots is unprecedented.Not only the best shooter of all
time
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he
also
 won 3
NBA
 championships ,
seven
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time
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NBA
 All-Star and
NBA
 Most Valuable Person twice. His personal life is just actually successful and blissful, he has a lovely family and a fancy life with a huge amount of money. He and his wife are the founders of numerous charity organizations and has provided at least 16 million meals to children in the past year. He is the ideal player for the point-guard position in
proffesional
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professional
 basketball. The one who
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 and goal precisely every
time
 he got the ball. He changed the way everyone
play
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 the game by scoring as much as 43.3
percent
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 of all his
three pointer
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 shoots.
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