In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution and give your own opinion?

Traffic congestion is a
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problem in
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city
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cities
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,
particulary
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particularly
in developing
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. Increasing the private
car
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and investing in public transportation
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to be the answer
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this
problem. From my view, I partial agree that
this
solution will reduce the
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amount
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car
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on the road because the effect
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cost
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the cost
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of living and economic issues must be considered.
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the fact that higher
car
's
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taxes
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decrease the demand of
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drivers
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in the street. In many
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metropolises
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, people prefer not to drive and count on train or
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buses
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as
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main way to travel in the city. Normally,
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will subsidise
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the
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, if people considering
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the public one result in low
cost
of living together with high quality of life for everyone.
This
kind of situation supports the statement that the
tax
rate should be increased and invest more in
pubulic
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public
properties.
On the other hand
, more
tax
means
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cost
of living. While public transportation is
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, having a can
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necessary
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.
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,
small
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retail business which is not
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by
professional
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the professional
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company has to
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the price of their product
as a result
of more logistic
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costs
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.
Consequently
, customers
suppos
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supposed
suppose
to pay more for 1 meal and have less money for buying the
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consuming
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. Eventually, quality of life will
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decrease
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. In conclusion,
improve
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the quality of public transportation lead to more satisfaction and less traffic problem.
However
, requesting more running
cost
from
car
owner
also
result in
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cost
of living.
This
decision has no answer for how much
cost
of having a
car
should be but it would be better to neatly consider every
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before collecting more money from people.
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