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Sport is becoming a business. More and more companies are getting involved in sporting events. Do you think that it is a positive or negative development ?

#sport #business #companies #events #development
At the present day,
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plenty of
sports
 are popular in the part of interesting from all generations and have numerous directions to access for the citizens. While most people
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belive
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 a lot of
business
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businesses
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 are becoming
to
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sponsers
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sponsors
 of any
sports
.
However
, Other people think
that is
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 decision of the facet. In my view, I firmly trust that it
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the
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 useful idea to encourage
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sports
. The worth organizations which they have
the
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 plethora of
benifical
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beneficial
 finance usually invest in
the
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sports
 .
This
 is due to the fact that The
competion
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competition
 between each branch of sport have
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 large number of guidance contribute to The promotion from the establishment and gain funds from the advertising.
Eventhought
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Even though
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 the
company
 have
the
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benificial
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beneficial
 investments. The teams which are encouraged
from
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 the
company
 are
recieve
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received
 the various money to utilize for administration and
creat
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 admirable for the
athelete
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athlete
.
For instance
, In
premier
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the premier
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leauge
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league
 which is the competitive football in England, They have many huge
team
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teams
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 are
gain
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 a lot of
number
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a number
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 of cash from advertising.
In
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 the other hand, The ways of investment from the
company
 are concerned by the real fans of
sports
becuase
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because
 some
athelete
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athletes
athlete
are
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 not able to
seperate
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separate
 between
reaponsibility
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responsibility
 and
the
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 large number of money.
As a result
, They do not have
focus
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in
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 the challenge and lack mediation to do their functions as possible and
efficacy
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 of players are not well at the previous time.
Moreover
, Some
company
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companies
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are only focus
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 on how to gain a lot of income from
this
 group regardless of
status
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 of the commercial and financial being through the sport team In conclusion,
Although
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in
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the conflict between citizens, They have suitable ways to solve
this
 issue that depending on
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attitude
attidude
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 of
individual
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. I believe the organizations which play a role with the
sports
 are able to help to
expanding
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this
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 circles to be
og
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on
higer
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higher
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