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The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs numerous governments expenditure. This money should be used in new housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree?

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Animals
 or Birds are living beings like
as
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a human
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human
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humans
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. Several people believe that
animals
 are not exploited by
humans
. But others opine that people must use
animals
 to
fulfill
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 their different requirements
such
 as food and
reseach
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research
. On one hand,
over exploitation
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 can result in the
extintion
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extinction
 of
species
 to a great extend. The disappearance of each
species
 can break the food chain and
hence
 develops an imbalance in
the
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nature.
This
 can
caiuse
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cause
 serious
side-effects
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side effects
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 in the existing ecosystem.
For instance
, the extensive exploitation of the bird 'Dodo' for the
meat
 results in the complete wipeout of that
species
 from earth. The
last
 'Dodo;
bird
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 was seen
in
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at
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 the end of
19th
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the 19th
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 century. Afterwards, the entire
species
 is disappeared due to the exploitation by
humans
 in its ecology.
On the other hand
, the
meat
 and associated products of
animals
 are used for food and research.
However
,
animals
meat
 is necessary to meet the daily requirements of
protien
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protein
,
vitamin
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vitamins
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 and carbohydrates for us.
Also
, it would be better to choose
animals
 for research purposes because if the
neww
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new
 medicines
tried
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are tried
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 in
humans
it
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they
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 may be ended up in
a negative results
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negative results
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 and can endanger the
existance
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existence
 of
human
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 race.
For instance
, before testing on
humans
 the trial dose of vaccine for COVID is
initially
 tested on white mice in the
labouratories
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laboratories
.
Moreover
, the recent survey conducted by WHO shows that protein act as a vital part to
build
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 cells in
humans
 and
which
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is abundantly obtained from consuming buffalo
meat
. So, In my opinion,
animals
 or birds are not exploited to grow the business.
Also
, consuming
meat
 and other products of
animals
 is mandatory to meet the vitamin and mineral requirements of adults and children.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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