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University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #education #income
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Higher
education
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 should be accessible to everyone, no matter what family background he comes from. I cannot entirely agree with
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 opinion; the reasons are shown below.
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, free access to universal fundamental
education
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 has put the government under heavy financial pressure, while it is a basic right for every citizen, as a taxpayer, to become literate with free primary
education
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. 
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, governments and
university
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 commissions pay a lot for offering quality
education
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, which aims to cultivate talents like professors in high-tech fields.
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, it is fair that
university
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 students pay for their own tuition fees to access
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. The fees they have paid will
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 be used to upgrade the campus facilities and hire high-quality teaching faculties to maintain the quality of higher
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, achieving a stable and balanced development of universities.
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, free tertiary
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 will possibly lead to the waste of educational resources. Beyond dispute, not all students are suitable for higher
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, and some people can create more value on manual work. To charge tuition fees will allow high school graduates to think twice about their career plans, rather than go straightly but aimlessly to
university
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. Some of them may choose to be wiremen and plumbers, honing their hands-on skills while helping to reduce the shortage of manual labour forces. And people who are eager to be degree-seekers can be admitted to
university
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 to
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 their
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. Overall, higher
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 should be charged to reach a balance between the cultivation of talents and the utilization of social resources. Not offering free high
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 does not mean discrimination against the students from poor family backgrounds.
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, they can easily apply for scholarships, bursaries, and loans to achieve their dreams in studies.
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