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In some countries more and more international travel is becoming cheaper and more countries are opening their doors to increase the number of tourists. Do the advantages of increasing tourism outweigh the disadvantage.

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Globalization ease up the travelling from one
country
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 to another
country
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. Several countries
reduces
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 the expenses to promote the
tourism
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 of
thier
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their
the
country
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 and
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 hiked the rate of tourists day by day. In my opinion,
tourism
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 gives lots of opportunities to the
country
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 which promotes.
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,
tourism
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 helps to boost the number of job exposure to
people
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 associated
to
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 it. The exchange of human power is the most common and
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, makes a rise in sectors
such
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 as restaurant, travels etc.
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, according to the recent survey conducted by the human resource department of United Nations analysed that over 33
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 of
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the hike
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hike
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 in the employment openings
occured
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occurred
 in the
last
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 year associated with the
tourism
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 sector.
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, the exchange of culture and language is
also
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 a significant part of
the
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tourism
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.
World
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 has a mosaic of cultural and linguistic values. So, travelling paved a way to understand different customs and languages.
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,
few
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a few
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 decades back, Onam is a festival
which
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 is only celebrated in Kerala. But today,
due
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 the exchange of
people
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 as a part of
tourism
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 relocated
malayalies
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Malayalees
Malayalis
 in each and every corner of the world. So, most of the
people
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 around the world is celebrating Onam as their own festival. To sum up,
tourism
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 improves the overall development of a
country
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 and
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people
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the people
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 related to it. So, it must say that the advantages of
tourism
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overcomes
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 the disadvantages.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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