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Online education is becoming more and more popular.some people claim that learning has so many benefits that it will replace face to face education soon.other says that traditional education is irreplaceable Discuss both views and share your opinion

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 of people assert that online education has so many strong points, others disagree with
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 and think that
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 method is irreplaceable. Two
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 of these viewpoints will be discussed in my following essay. On the one hand , traditional education
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 number of strong points in many aspects.
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,
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the old
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teching
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teaching
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appropriate
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 for some situations.
On the other hand
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, learning via
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the internet
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 provide more comfortable and
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flexibility for modern life. Supplying fast connect from any location within
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.
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, students can access
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 the lesson whenever they would like to be. To illustrates, As a
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, To sum up ,
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many
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 the several benefits of on-site learning
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 as offering more
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interconnection
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 between lecturer and students , others think that
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 system
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 more effective
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associated
 with convenience and flexibility .
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nowadays.
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