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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is true that some
people
 gain fame by their glamourous lifestyles rather than the
work
 they do. While I accept that
such
people
 set a bad example for children, I totally believe that many celebrities may act as positive role models.
Firstly
, some famous
people
 gain reputation without
work
 for it.
This
 is because they may have had a notorious social life, appeared in magazine covers and on reality TV programs. A good example would be Kim Kardashian, who is famous for her family TV show
that is
 around the classy life, and dramatic events that she deliberately creates. Her success may promote the idea that building dramas might achieve popularity and wealth easily,
instead
 of working hard in a particular field.
As a result
, it would have a negative impact on children who idolize her lifestyles and the way she becomes famous.
On the other hand
, many stars are known for their enduring
work
 ethic and real talents. These
people
 devote their energy to develop their skills and abilities in the long term before achieving their accomplishments, and teenagers may learn from them the good qualities. Cristiano Ronaldo,
for example
, who is a world-class successful footballer, is described as an icon of great effort, ambition, and determination.
This
 kind of self-made celebrity can inspire children to
work
 hard and aim for ambitious goals throughout the years. In conclusion,
although
 notorious individuals can gain popularity simply, those who apply themselves to achieve their goals in chosen areas are the true idols of young
people
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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