The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?
The World's population is increasing at
such
a high rate each day. I agree with the statement that growth in the planet's population is the biggest challenge faced by humanity during current
time. Add an article
the current
This
growth is leading to various struggles for them such
as depleting of
essential Change preposition
apply
resources
at faster
rate. Add an article
a faster
Additionally
, improper family planning is also
the biggest reason of
Change preposition
for
this
increase.
Firstly
, planet
has Add an article
the planet
limited
amount of Add an article
a limited
the
Correct article usage
apply
resources
. If not used wisely , shortage
of these Correct article usage
a shortage
resources
will occur in future. Rise
in Add an article
The rise
A rise
number
of people Change the article
a number
the number
directly
proportional to Add a missing verb
is directly
rise
in the amount of these Correct article usage
the rise
resources
being exploited by them. For instance
, if a family has less member
Fix the agreement mistake
fewer members
than
they will be needing less water and electricity compared to they need when Correct your spelling
then
their
are more Replace the word
there
number of
members. Careful use is of the Correct quantifier usage
apply
atmost
importance.
Correct your spelling
utmost
On the other hand
, improper family planning also
contributes as one of the causes in this
continuous rise. Each family on an
average is having more than 2 children. Correct article usage
apply
Instead
of having the quantity , people should focus on the quality. They should consider their family income and plan accordingly
. If their
are more people than the income Replace the word
there
need
to Change the verb form
needs
fullfill
their needs , Correct your spelling
fulfil
this
leads to poor
way of living. Add an article
a poor
the poor
For example
, if family income is not sufficient to satisfy needs of the one child
and Add a hyphen
one-child
family
has three , in Correct article usage
the family
such
cases
neither of the children will get proper facilities like education.
In conclusion, thoughtful use of Add a comma
,cases
resources
, proper family planning , restricted number of childer in each family can help to resolves the above issues. At last
, the struggle of humanity can be reduced by proper family planning, using what is required and save.Submitted by ashi.bdps on
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