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Universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject. To what extend do you agree or disagree

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In tertiary education ,institutes there should be gender equality in all subjects. I, agree with the view coupled with some reservations which will be explicated in
this
 essay. Certainly, to eliminate gender discrimination in higher studies there should be reservation of the same number of
seats
 in the distinct courses. Ergo, there are certain fields that are solely restricted to the males
such
 as defence, mechanical engineering and to mention a few.
As a result
,
women
's hesitate to enrol in these particular fields.
In other words
, when there is an allocation of an equivalent number of
seats
 the
females
 get a chance to outshine in the field of their
interest
.
For example
, in ,defence there is a surge in the population of
women
 due to the provision of a similar enrolment ratio.
Thus
,
this
 policy is advantageous as one can get admission in a subject of their
interest
. Adding
further
 to
this
, with
this
 system there will be a decline in the crime rate against
females
 in the college premises as they stand inequality.
Moreover
,
this
 system will provide opportunities for
females
 to pursue subjects of their
interest
. Indeed, there is a long list of
such
females
 who bring laurels to the nation when provided with the opportunity. Eventually,
this
 initiative would definitely work in direction of upliftment of
women
's. To illustrate, Mission mars team comprises 50%
females
 which act as a motivation for others
also
.
Therefore
, having an equal number of
seats
 provide the chance for
females
 to prove their intelligence to the world. In compendium, the gender biases in higher education institutes
is
Change the verb form
are
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 evidently witnessed , but the allocation of
seats
 help
women
 to pursue the field of their
interest
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • balanced
  • learning environment
  • opportunities
  • perspectives
  • gender stereotypes
  • fairness
  • equal opportunities
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