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Some people say that success is 10 percent talent and 90 percent hard work Is hard worknow the key to success, or is talent also important Give reason for your anewer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#people #success #percent #talent #work #worknow #reason #anewer
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In recent years around the
world
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lot
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 of people arguing on an individual
sucess
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success
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achive
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achieve
 only by hard
work
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 and
where as
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whereas
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 others believe a person
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wants
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want
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towant
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 be blue on
moon
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the moon
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be elevate
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 their
talent
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 above the hard
work
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. We need to agree the identification of an
idividual
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individual
scusess
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success
 depends on various factors. In
this
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 we are going to discuss both points with
an
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apat
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, around the
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world
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 we heard
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lot
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 of great people
sucess
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success
strories
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stories
 which they achieved through their hard
work
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.
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, there were many great political leaders in the society
they
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 came to power by their hard
work
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instead
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 of
talent
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. They started their carrier as a political party
memeber
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member
members
 and
with
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their dedication towards the
work
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 lead them to
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next
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 position
such
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 as
member
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 of
parliment
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parliament
 and they continue their hard
work
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reach
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next
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 level in their carrier. It clearly
state
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 that they don't need any
talent
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 to reach
this
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 position. On other hand, we heard
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lot
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a lot
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 of
stroies
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stories
 about recent technology leaders who are ruling the
world
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 with their vision towards technology .
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,
Steave
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Steve
 jobs who was
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college
colleague
colleage
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a colleage
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 drop out from
an
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a
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 university with his vision and incredible
talent
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establishe
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established
establish
Apple
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the Apple
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 brand. It was one of the most reliable
brand
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 on the globe. The man who
done
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has done
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lot
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a lot
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 of hard
work
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 and huge
talent
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 establish
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himself
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him self
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himself
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 as
a
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icionic
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iconic
 person in
digital
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the digital
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world
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. In conclusion, as an individual growth can be
achive
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achieved
achieve
 through
hardwork
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hard work
 and
talent
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.
However
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, I would consider
only
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hardwork
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hard work
 will not help to climb height without
talent
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. It
suppose
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 to be
combination
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a combination
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 of both
hardwork
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hard work
hard-work
 and
talent
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 to reach beyond heights in
theire
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their
 carrier.
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