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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Some
people
 believe that adolescents have to seek a job or travel for a period in which they have leisure
time
 between finishing high school and beginning university studies. In my perspective, taking experience in that
time
also
 has some positive aspects and some drawbacks. On the one hand, seeking a job or travelling for a long
time
also
 takes advantage of a student's experience, which totally expands the ability to respond in special circumstances. When they finish high school, most of them
also
 are taken care
by
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 their parents, so
this
 is an extremely huge chance to make
money
, and
also
 help them to figure out the value of
money
.
In addition
, they must take responsibility for what they do.
Besides
, travelling brings
people
 an abundance of intriguing experiences
such
 as exploring strange
traditionals
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traditional
traditions
, weird foods,
culturals
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cultural
,… without any life’s pressure. The
time
 when you just completed high school is nerve-racking,
therefore
 travelling is a definitely fantastic way to refresh their mind before moving to the university.
On the other hand
, encouraging students to work in that period radically affects the student's awareness about
study
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. A year is a long
time
 that makes
people
 lose their good study habits and
also
 strongly decline their sense of discipline. If they get used to
make
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money
, they will absolutely forget the purpose of study, the benefit of the college or university environment which is attributed to the lack of high standard resources. In conclusion, the more opportunities we received, the bigger the price that we paid for it.
People
 must make decisions carefully and decide on what is most desirable.
Although
 working soon will help you meet the demand for
money
, keeping
a
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damnation about the future will
also
 make you better at many things.
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  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
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  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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