In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Some
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believe that adolescents have to seek a job or travel for a period in which they have leisure
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between finishing high school and beginning university studies. In my perspective, taking experience in that
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has some positive aspects and some drawbacks. On the one hand, seeking a job or travelling for a long
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takes advantage of a student's experience, which totally expands the ability to respond in special circumstances. When they finish high school, most of them
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are taken care
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their parents, so
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is an extremely huge chance to make
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help them to figure out the value of
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, they must take responsibility for what they do.
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, travelling brings
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an abundance of intriguing experiences
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as exploring strange
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traditional
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, weird foods,
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cultural
,… without any life’s pressure. The
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when you just completed high school is nerve-racking,
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travelling is a definitely fantastic way to refresh their mind before moving to the university.
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, encouraging students to work in that period radically affects the student's awareness about
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. A year is a long
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that makes
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lose their good study habits and
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strongly decline their sense of discipline. If they get used to
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money
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, they will absolutely forget the purpose of study, the benefit of the college or university environment which is attributed to the lack of high standard resources. In conclusion, the more opportunities we received, the bigger the price that we paid for it.
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must make decisions carefully and decide on what is most desirable.
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working soon will help you meet the demand for
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, keeping
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damnation about the future will
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make you better at many things.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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