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The process illustrated in the pictures shows the steps of leather production, starting from the raw material, animal skin, to the final product, such as shoes and bags.

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Leather
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 production
process
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” The
process
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 illustrated in the pictures shows the steps of
leather
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 production, starting from the raw material, animal
skin
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, to the final product,
such
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 as shoes and bags. The procedure itself is deep enough and accurate to fabricate the highest quality products, without violating the algorithm of creation. The operation begins with drying the animal
skin
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, which is
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 transported to a factory. Upon arrival at the factory, the
skin
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 undergoes a washing
process
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 combining water and lime to remove impurities and prepare it for
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 treatment. After washing, the
skin
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 is soaked in a solution of lime to soften it
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. The softened
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 undergoes a flattening
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, where it is stretched and smoothed out. The next step involves soaking the
skin
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 in a mixture of tannin, water, and vegetable matter.
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 tanning
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 is crucial as it strengthens the
leather
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 and makes it durable. Following tanning, the
leather
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 is polished to give it a smooth and shiny finish.
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, the polished
leather
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 is transferred back to the facility, where it is crafted into various items like shoes, bags, and other accessories. The actions shown
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 the conversion of raw animal hides into premium
leather
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 goods, highlighting the significance of every stage in ensuring the final result's quality and durability.
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coherence cohesion
In the introduction, provide a clearer overview of the process and mention the main stages briefly to set the context for the reader.
coherence cohesion
Include a brief conclusion to summarize the main steps and comment on the importance or impact of the process.
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Be cautious with word choice and phrasing. Some parts, such as 'without violating the algorithm of creation,' could be clearer and more concise.
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The essay provides a detailed and comprehensive description of each stage in the leather production process.
coherence cohesion
Logical flow and progression of ideas are maintained throughout the essay.
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Each step is clearly explained, with a focus on how it contributes to the overall process.

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