More and more wild animals are being kept in the zoo these days. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

In
this
modern era, the wildlife conservation authorities have resorted to making the zoo home for non-domestic
animals
.
This
trend
mainly
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for
safety
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both
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the public and the
animals
. I believe
this
idea has enormous merits than demerits for the following reasons.
To begin
with, there are
ampel
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ample
reasons to justify the above-given statement as
first
, the public is protected from attack by wild
animals
;
for example
,
such
as Lions and Tigers are
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dangerous beast to the community as they injure the people,
as a result
, sometimes the population get worst wound in order to they spend a lot of amount on
medical
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bill, even death might
be happened
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.
Second
, these kinds of
fauna
should be protected in the zoo because the
hunders
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hunters
are hunted wildlife for their food and economy,
thus
, more and more
fauna
are endangered
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these days.
Hence
,
this
kind of non-domestic
animals
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animal
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should be kept in
the
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zoos rather than
roming
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roaming
coming
in residential areas.
Conversely
, every
creatures
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should be lived in freedom,
noone
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no one
does
not
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have a
rights
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to
put
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in
cage
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but many
fauna
conservative persons are done
thus
, they earn huge
amount
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of money from
tourist
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tourists
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visiting these
place
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places
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.
For example
, Lion is the king of
forest
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, but we
put
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in a
cage
like a cat so, they cannot understand of the entire life who am
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thus
, it will bein
stresssful
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stressful
in life long.
This
trend
certaily
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certainly
,
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should be affected
to
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the
fauna
well-being, their's house is a forest
not
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a
cage
but we are kept in
locked
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cage
,
as a result
, they might be gotten
stressful
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and
depression
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,
thus
, they will be
attacked
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to the
care taker
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.
Hence
, the wildlife should be lived in freedom. To conclude, In my opinion, about
this
, the non-domestic
animals
should be kept in
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a cage
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cage
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cages
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instead
of roaming in residential
place
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places
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because they are not
a
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pet
animlas
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animals
animal
. I would recommend, these
animals
are properly maintain
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and protect
to
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the zoo authorities in order to save their's life from hunting.
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