More and more wild animals are being kept in the zoo these days. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?
In
this
modern era, the wildlife conservation authorities have resorted to making the zoo home for non-domestic animals
. This
trend mainly
for Add a missing verb
is mainly
safety
Correct article usage
the safety
both
the public and the Change preposition
of both
animals
. I believe this
idea has enormous merits than demerits for the following reasons.
To begin
with, there are ampel
reasons to justify the above-given statement as Correct your spelling
ample
first
, the public is protected from attack by wild animals
; for example
, such
as Lions and Tigers are very
dangerous beast to the community as they injure the people, Add an article
a very
as a result
, sometimes the population get worst wound in order to they spend a lot of amount on medical
bill, even death might Add an article
a medical
be happened
. Change to the active voice
happen
have happened
Second
, these kinds of fauna
should be protected in the zoo because the hunders
are hunted wildlife for their food and economy, Correct your spelling
hunters
thus
, more and more fauna
are endangered in
these days. Change preposition
apply
Hence
, this
kind of non-domestic animals
should be kept in Fix the agreement mistake
animal
the
zoos rather than Correct article usage
apply
roming
in residential areas.
Correct your spelling
roaming
coming
Conversely
, every creatures
should be lived in freedom, Change to a singular noun
creature
noone
does Correct your spelling
no one
not
have a Rewrite the sentence
apply
rights
to Fix the agreement mistake
right
put
in Add a missing verb
be put
cage
but many Add an article
the cage
a cage
fauna
conservative persons are done thus
, they earn huge amount
of money from Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
tourist
visiting these Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
place
. Fix the agreement mistake
places
For example
, Lion is the king of forest
, but we Add an article
the forest
put
in a Add a missing verb
are put
cage
like a cat so, they cannot understand of the entire life who am i
Change the capitalization
I
thus
, it will bein stresssful
in life long. Correct your spelling
stressful
This
trend certaily
Correct your spelling
certainly
,
should be affected Remove the comma
apply
to
the Change preposition
by
fauna
well-being, their's house is a forest not
a Add the comma(s)
,not
cage
but we are kept in locked
Add an article
a locked
cage
, as a result
, they might be gotten stressful
and Replace the word
stressed
depression
, Replace the word
depressed
thus
, they will be attacked
to the Correct your spelling
attached
care taker
. Correct your spelling
caretaker
Hence
, the wildlife should be lived in freedom.
To conclude, In my opinion, about this
, the non-domestic animals
should be kept in Add an article
a cage
the cage
cage
Fix the agreement mistake
cages
instead
of roaming in residential place
because they are not Fix the agreement mistake
places
a
pet Correct article usage
apply
animlas
. I would recommend, these Correct your spelling
animals
animal
animals
are properly maintain
and protect Change the verb form
are properly maintained
to
the zoo authorities in order to save their's life from hunting.Change preposition
by
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
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- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
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- The disadvantage of this...
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- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...
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