Some people believe that it's beneficial for students to study at home than sending school. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction

It is believed by a lot of individuals that homeschooling is much better

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traditional education as learning can be done online. I think that teaching

children

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schools

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is a better idea.

Body paragraph 1

Despite having a great advancement in technology, students still need to have

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proper guidance from the

teacher

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and

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the thing, which is not possible while teaching them at home.

Children

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who are studying in

schools

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can ask a question and queries that they have, and solve their doubts. If

sometime

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student

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students

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face

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any kind of difficulty

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not being solved by the

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, they could do it practically at

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schools

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where they have practical labs for that. Since they study in the school they

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going to develop their social skills because they are so many students and while studying they interact with each other, which enable them to be more confident

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of being an

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person while sitting at home.

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Having

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proper attention on

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the student

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student

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is another benefit of sending them

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schools

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. Generally, it could be seen that most of the student's parents are working and they do not have proper time to see that whether

study

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the study

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is being done by the

children

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or not. It might be possible that in the absence of them they do not do the work or if they hire any

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then

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for that they have to pay

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a huge amount of money.

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, It would be better if they send their

children

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schools

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since there

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always a

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, who always have supervision on them to observe what they are doing.

Conclusion

To conclude, development in their social skills and having

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proper guidance are the things that make teaching students at

schools

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more preferable rather than studying

children

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at home.

jashan6334

Sep 5, 2021

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3
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17
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5.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

302 words

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