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Band 1

Some people think residents should keep their streets clean and tidy while others say it is government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
the
pie
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 chart
we
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apply
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show
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shows
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 how
changed
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apply
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use
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sources
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 of energy in the USA
1980
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from 1980
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 before 1990 years
Body paragraph 1
in the
pie
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chart
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 we show
main
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the main
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sources
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oil
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of oil
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,natural
gas
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,coal,hydroelectric
power
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 and nuclear
power
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.
Body paragraph 2
in
USA
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the USA
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 earlier used a
lot
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lot of
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 energy oil,over
time
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 is lowest and the others almost not changed
Body paragraph 3
we will compare
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this
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these
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pie
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 charts
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this
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to this
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 task
Body paragraph 4
the 2
pie
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 chart
show
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shows
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 how changed in 10 years
sources
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 of energy in the USA, here we can compare nuclear
power
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 almost
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this
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these
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sources
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increase
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increased
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 twice and other
sources
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 especially oil decreased
in
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by
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 9 %
then
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 hydroelectric
power
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 and natural
gas
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 it has not changed over
time
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Body paragraph 5
I was surprised when
sources
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coal
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of coal
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increase
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increased
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on
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by
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 5%
i
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I
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 think with
time
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 people do not
use
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 coal because
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today
todays
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today
 many people prefer
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use
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to use
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 natural
gas
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,
i
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I
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 suppose many
manufactures
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manufacturers
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use
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 coal for
this
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 coal increase over
time
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 than natural
gas
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Conclusion
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introduction conclusion present
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, which are essential for setting the context and summarizing the main points. Develop these sections to guide the reader.
logical structure
The logical structure of the essay is flawed. It jumps between ideas without clear connections. Use paragraphing to organize your ideas and employ linking words to show relationships between them.
supported main points
Main points are not fully developed or well-supported. To improve, expand on your points with explanations, evidence, or examples.
complete response
The response does not fulfill the requirements of the task. Address the topic by discussing both views mentioned in the prompt and providing your own opinion.
clear comprehensive ideas
There is a lack of clear and comprehensive ideas. The essay need to clarify the points being made and how they relate to the prompt.
relevant specific examples
There is a need for more relevant and specific examples to support the points being made. Providing real-life instances or specific data would greatly improve the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community responsibility
  • living environment
  • immediate and consistent
  • public spaces
  • resources and infrastructure
  • standardized level
  • hygiene
  • collaborative approach
  • mutual responsibility
  • government-led initiatives
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