IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 1

Some people think residents should keep their streets clean and tidy while others say it is government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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introduction conclusion present
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, which are essential for setting the context and summarizing the main points. Develop these sections to guide the reader.
logical structure
The logical structure of the essay is flawed. It jumps between ideas without clear connections. Use paragraphing to organize your ideas and employ linking words to show relationships between them.
supported main points
Main points are not fully developed or well-supported. To improve, expand on your points with explanations, evidence, or examples.
complete response
The response does not fulfill the requirements of the task. Address the topic by discussing both views mentioned in the prompt and providing your own opinion.
clear comprehensive ideas
There is a lack of clear and comprehensive ideas. The essay need to clarify the points being made and how they relate to the prompt.
relevant specific examples
There is a need for more relevant and specific examples to support the points being made. Providing real-life instances or specific data would greatly improve the essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community responsibility
  • living environment
  • immediate and consistent
  • public spaces
  • resources and infrastructure
  • standardized level
  • hygiene
  • collaborative approach
  • mutual responsibility
  • government-led initiatives
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