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As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing more and more jobs. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers and discuss at one problem that may result.

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Nowadays, there is no doubt that computers bring us tons of benefits. With the rapid growth of technology, it plays human’s roles in different departments.
This
 essay will discuss some tasks they can help us to do, and the result that might happen. With the advantages of science, there are thousands of jobs can be replaced by computers, or in another word,
robots
. Many
robots
 are using in developed countries
such
 as Japan, and Singapore in restaurants, schools, malls, even hospitals. Their
job
 range is wide, from accounting, helping with directions, cleaning, and sometimes in surgeries. It is a machine with fewer mistakes than human beings. It can work long hours without complaining. And one of the biggest points is that they can replace the old workforce in low population countries. It is not rare in Singapore to see
robots
 running around cleaning public areas or reminding people to keep a safe distance.
In contrast
, there are disadvantages that come along. Using too many
robots
 can spoil the
job
 market.
Job
 seekers will find it more difficult to find a
job
 since companies can cut off manpower for certain tasks to save costs. A one-time investment can work 24 hours, for
a
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 long term, it is worth more than hiring 2 staff to work 2 shifts.
Also
, society could be less interaction among humans. People say the atmosphere is “cold” to let
robots
 serve at restaurants because they cannot emotionally express their words like us. In a nutshell, it should be in balance in using computers’ technology in modern life. Overuse of computers can cause humans to laziness, and dependence.
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