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Eating a balanced diet is the most important factor for a healthy life. To what extent do you agree?

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We live in a modern age where
people
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 tend to lead a sedentary life most of the time. To compensate for it and overcome the health issues, many believe that having a balanced
diet
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 is the most important factor. I radically believe that a balanced
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 crucial but along with it daily exercises
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 plays a vital role.
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 with, there are definitely a plethora of advantages of eating a balanced
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.
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, be it a person who mostly performs field
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 or sits in front of a computer and
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, all they need is energy .
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 will be provided by nutritional food which
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 for the long term rather than junk food.
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, a survey conducted by Harvard showed that
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 eating a balanced
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 lead a healthier life than
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 who don't.
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, consuming vitamins and minerals too much even though they are beneficial will often lead to obesity.
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, when the rate of consumption is more than the rate of expenditure,
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 will get fat as these nutritional values turn into cholesterol.
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, a person who
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 in an IT company will eventually suffer from obesity which will
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 lead to other consequences due to lack of exercise.
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, exercise will provide humans with a perfect shape
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 quite attractive and even keeps our minds fresh and open to new thoughts. All in all, maintaining a balanced
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 is crucial to lead a healthy life along with daily exercise.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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