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Some people think that individuals are born to be leaders, others believe leadership can be learnt. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #individuals #leaders #leadership #learnt
Leadership is always a
controversal
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controversial
 topic that if it is a skill that can be developed or it is inherited since a person
born
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.
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 and provide
evidences
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evidence
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 as to why I firmly believe that anyone can be
leader
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a leader
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 if we learn the right method to gradually develop the right skills. On the one hand, we cannot reject that most of the great
leaders
 in
this
 world have
a unique personalities
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. Their charismatic body
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language
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 and
voices
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 can lead
people
believe
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on
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 their visions and follow their directions. They always have the powerful method to convince
people
 as something we cannot explain but they are in common in successful
leaders
.
Furthermore
, especially in families businesses, the
leader
role
 is mostly passed through generations.
For instance
, in most
of
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chinese
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the chinese
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 families, the oldest son will take the
role
 of
familiy
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family
leader
 as the
norms
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. In
this
 case,
doesn't
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 you agree that it is
only
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specific
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a specific
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 person born to
leader
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a leader
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?
On the other hand
, there are many reasons and examples why leadership can be learnt.
Firstly
, there is a
reserch
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research
 that must-have skill that reputable
leaders
 have are
people
 management and most of them can learn
this
 skill from experiences. For
examples
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, when I need to take a manager
role
 to lead
team
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a team
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, I have struggled during
first
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 couple
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of months
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;
however
, once I could notice my problems and consult with my older supervisor, I
finally
 can develop the right method to work and lead my team effectively.
Secondly
, there are many good business schools or even a number of short
corses
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courses
 that we can take to improve and adapt
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required
requried
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the requried
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 skills that good
leaders
 should have. In summary, it seems to me that though leadership is always the
role
people
 think it is only for someone born to be, if we could try and put our best effort enough, anyone can
also
 learn to be a good
leader
.
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