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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. what are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places

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Nowadays many travelholics are ready to take risks to explore something new.
People
 do travel frequently to different
palces
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places
 for variety of reasons like to learn the culture of host
countriy
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country
 or to seek adventures
experice
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experience
.
However
, the reasons can be different but the passion to do journey has increasing day by day.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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the pros and cons of visiting
places
, which has
extreme
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climate
.
To begin
 with, the important
benifit
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benefit
benefits
 of travelling to the
places
 where the
climate
 is not acceptable is, to do
reserch
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research
 about the weather.
Second
, some humans
likes
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 to travel to feel adventures and the most noticeable category
people
 are the
one
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 who
do
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 travel for being alone for some reason. To exemplify, nature lovers and writers are most common persons usually visit
these kind
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 of
places
 to explore their experiences to the world. Perhaps,
this
 is
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another benefit.
On the contrary
, the demerits of visiting these
places
 are many.
First
, some
people
 may fall sick immediately due to intolerable
climate
 and may face death
also
.
This
 is the most dangerous
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draw back
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.
In addition
, lack of food supply to these regions may affect the traveller who
plan
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 for
long
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 stay. Apart from
this
, sometimes
person
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 may experience
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 or depression because of isolation. To exemplify,
although
the
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people
 may seek
for
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adventurous
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 most of them may land up with failure. To sum up, there are many advantages and disadvantages
for
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 travelling to the
places
 which
has
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 the
climate
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 peak still humans are ready to take a trip.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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