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happiness in considered very important in life. why is it difficult to define? what factors are important in achieving happiness?

#happiness #life #factors
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Humans like to live a happy
life
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 always, but it is not possible all the time because
happiness
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 and sadness are the two sides of a coin.
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, it is tough to explain the real meaning of bliss, perhaps, few things literally enhance euphoria among people. I will discuss
about
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this
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 in detail in the following paragraphs.
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 with, people may
excited
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 for different reasons in many situations. So, to precise in
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 sentence “
Happiness
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 is a beautiful feeling to be experienced by oneself”.
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, it cannot be measured. To exemplify, many adults feel delighted while earning money.
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, for others staying healthy and active
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 the way of being happy.
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, the children may feel joy when they receive any new toy or gift but the youngsters may excite
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 some other things like doing any adventures trips or riding a bullet. To conclude, all humans will experience
happiness
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 in
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 or
other
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 manner during their
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 journey but nobody can define it.
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, leading a
stress free
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life
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 is the only way of enjoying
happiness
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 to its peak. To achieve
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, lots of things people can adopt, like
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 yoga and meditation, listening to good music and
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 but important
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 is living the
life
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 according to
one
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’s own wish.
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, nowadays many
counseling
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centers
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also
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 available for the
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 who needs
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assistance to bring back their bliss
life
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. To sum up, it is the ultimate choice of the person to decide whether should lead a happy
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 or not.
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, to have a peaceful
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one
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 must find
happiness
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 in whatever they do. Because it is vital to stay healthy during
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 short journey by being merry.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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