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There is a good deal of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming and having other undesirable effects on people’s health and well-being. What can be done to discourage people from using their cars?

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Recently, there is much evidence indicate that the increasing usage of
cars
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 has caused a drastic change in
people
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’s health and well-being as well as contributing to global warming. In my opinion, I believe that there are two ways that
government
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 can do to discourage
people
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 from using their
cars
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.
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 with,
Government
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 can gradually limit
cars
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 usage by imposing taxes.
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 is because if
people
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 find it costly to
use
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 their
cars
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, they will more likely to
use
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 them only when it is necessary.
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, in Europe, the car gas prices are high and there are ticket stations on most of the highways.
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, a lot of
people
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 in Europe
use
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 electric public means of transport
instead
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 of their
cars
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 most of the time.
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,
this
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 approach alone is not effective in encouraging
people
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 to
use
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 alternatives for their
cars
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.
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,
Government
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 should motivate
people
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 to
use
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 environmentally friendly means of transport. The reason for
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 is that there are many
people
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 who live in remote and rural areas, who are mainly dependent on their
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;
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, they are more likely to not have access to the public transportation network in their regions.
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, in the United States of America, the
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 built many electric
cars
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 charging stations and offers tax reductions for those who buy electric
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.
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, the number of fuel-based
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 started to decrease significantly leading to a less polluted environment
that is
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 healthy for everyone in the long run. In conclusion, the issue caused by the increased
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 of
cars
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 will not be solved in a short time.
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, the
government
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 can play a pivotal role in tackling
this
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 issue by imposing taxes on car usage and give reasonable motivation for
people
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 to
use
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 environmentally friendly means of transport.
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