Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
In most countries around the
world
, technology is unexpectedly advanced and can have certain uses. Use synonyms
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, if used in the right manner for the right purposes Linking Words
such
as tracking and surveillance on certain people which is done almost everywhere, it is now so common that it goes unnoticed. Linking Words
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essay will discuss the positives and negatives of the given points.
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To begin
with, technological advancement is something which is experienced almost everywhere in the Linking Words
world
. Keeping track of certain devices and what they are used for can be very beneficial for activities Use synonyms
such
as avoidance of online frauds which can be kept an eye on from any online server. Linking Words
For example
, the FBI stated in 2015 that 50% Linking Words
lesser
cases of online crimes were reported once internet surveillance was introduced. Call tapping and Correct word choice
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surveillance
such
as security cameras have many roles in helping police departments all around the Linking Words
world
to identify certain criminals and aiding Use synonyms
to avoid
illegal acts harming the country. In general, 70% of public places are watched by cameras for safety. It is Change preposition
in avoiding
therefore
an important factor to consider.
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On the other hand
, monitoring might be considered as a major privacy breach Linking Words
likewise
not preferring these activities. Most of the population might Linking Words
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due to
being discovered they are being watched all the time, as online data saved on humans might be sold to third-party organizations. Linking Words
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data to companies for AD campaigns which Change noun form
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to several people breaking their trust in securities.
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automation has several benefits, Use synonyms
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, it might not be considered safe and trustworthy in terms of different minds.Linking Words
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