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. These days, many people prefer ready to eat food outside of their home rather than homemade food. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages?

#people #food #home
Nowadays,
the
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people are influenced more by
sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle
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life-style
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lifestyle
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.
Moreover
, they consider
this
 as
status
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 symbol.
Although
, many are aware
about
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 the demerits of fast
food
, still they
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this
 habit because of
tight
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 work
schedule
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.
This
 essay will discuss the pros and cons of outside eating trends because, I believe that, homemade foods can keep
person
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a person
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 healthy always. To
kick off
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, the people can eat homemade foods with
confident
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 because
,
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 they
knows
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 better about the ingredients they added and
hygiene
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the hygiene
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 they maintained while cooking.
In addition
,
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a human
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human
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humans
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 can enjoy fresh
food
 in
the
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 delicious way.
For example
, while cooking at home people never use
food
 colours or preservatives.
Moreover
, the
peeople
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people
 will not even think of using
a spoiled meat
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spoiled meat
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 or vegetable. So, the person who
eat
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 homemade
food
 can stay healthy and happy. To continue with, the person who
eat
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 regularly at a restaurant can easily land up with many health issues.The
first
 and the foremost one is gastric discomforts. It is because of, the use of
the
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artificial
flavoring
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 agents.
For instance
, they may use expired items
also
 for cooking.
This
 will cause serious problems to
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human-like
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human
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humans
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 like, from a simple stomach ache to
the
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colon cancer. To summarize it is dangerous to take fast
food
 frequently.
Finally
, having fast
food
 daily can cause
life-threatening
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the life-threatening
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issue
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 to
human
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humans
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 and homemade eating nature can increase life span. So, it is the individual's choice to choose the best.
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