Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The idea that  whether
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who have the best grades or those who make great strides in their studies should receive
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remains a source of controversy in the education field. While a number of people believe that only
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achieving the highest grades deserve
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,  I would argue that it is more significant for
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who make great progress to receive recognition. On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why
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with the highest scores deserve
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.
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,
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will create a highly competitive studying environment at schools, seeing that every child desires to win prizes.
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,
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in classes will be motivated to put effort into studying for examinations.
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, those who get the best grades should have a chance to nurture their abilities.
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, schools could select gifted
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with the highest scores for extra classes to take part in national competitions.
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, I believe that it is more necessary for schools to give
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to pupils who make strides in their studies. The
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benefit is that every child deserves to have an equal chance to receive awards.
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, by doing so,
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of feeling disappointed when
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who are not very academically inclined compete with their top classmates, teachers will motivate them to study at school. Another benefit is that
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form of recognition follows a holistic principle of learning, which is to access
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the world of knowledge, not just to gain the highest scores. As a consequence, several common phenomena which occur when examinations approach, including cheating, anxiety and pressure, will be reduced. In conclusion,
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rewarding the highest achievers is advantageous to some extent, It seems to me that it is more significant for teachers to praise those who make progress in their studies.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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