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Some people think that the government should spend money on adult’s population who can’t read and write while other not. To what extend to you agree or disagree?

#people #government #money #adult’s #population #can’t
Some group of
people
 asset that authority
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should
 spend
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amount
most
 of
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budget
 for adults who are
unfuntion
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function
 of reading and
wrighting
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writing
 to enhance
thier
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their
 career , while some
people
 disagree and think that government should pay for other factors that significantly
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 for all citizens. In the following paragraphs , both of these viewpoints will be discussed in
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detail
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 before
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a conclusion
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 is reached. On the one hand , there are many reasons why supporting
audults
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adults
 who have some problem of education , especially the ability of reading and
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writing
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.
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First
, high level of ability can be gian more income and better occupations , leading to improve quality of
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their
 family and
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their
 children.
For example
 , drivers who can not read receive less salary than
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officers
 who are able to do that more as well as
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the person
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person
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people
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 who can write can be hired on the position higher than one .
Therefore
. Spending some money to advocate
this
 group is
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worth with
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 for
inverstment
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investment
 to eliminate poverty.
On the other hand
, there
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 some
argument
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arguments
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 that
not
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do not
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 support the idea mentioned above. Others believe that government
shold
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should
 play an important role
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in
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 budgets for other things that influence
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the
mojortity
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majority
 of citizens.
First
 and foremost , they think that adults can
gian
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gain
 income from themselves, unlike children or disorder
people
,
thus
 the authority no need to spent some country's taxation to encourage
this
 group. Another reason is,
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government
 should utilise
this
 budget for crucial infrastructures
such
 as road, city
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trains
 , and other urgent problems as it
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tremendously
 effect for all .
Accordingly
,it is apparent that investment in big
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scale
 could help the
mojority
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majority
 of
people
 To sum up, it can be
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emphasized
 that despite some
people
 think that spending money
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 adults' education is the waste of money, others think that
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it
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 can improve life
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quality
 of
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people
 and can eradicate the poverty problem. As a
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result
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,
government
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the government
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 should
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trade-off
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this
budjet
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budget
 for entirely
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effective
 allocating for their
people
.
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