Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

Many countries of the world are currently facing
problems
of overpopulation due to migration towards the urban areas and various
problems
are faced like social and economic and both
government
and individuals should take a step to reduce these
problems
. The
problems
of overpopulation
leads
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to poor quality housing and
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over crowding
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overcrowding
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This
can be hit the urban society with poverty and bad health factors because when
the
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more people are engaged in one particular work or profesionilletrate so underemployment will be more and because of illiterate people those who have come to settle in urban area have difficulty to get a job and they will present poor section of society which is
also
a big problem and because of overcrowding may
effect
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health factors
also
. In terms of solution,I believe the
government
should take
step
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forward to reduce overcrowding and should provide the needs either in urban and rural areas and we should
also
take
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step
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to reduce these
problems
by involving into businesses
instead
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running after the jobs and it will
also
provide jobs so that underemployment and
also
reduce migration.
This
overcrowding is
also
rising as a crime and to stop
this
government
should pay some attention to it and individuals should
also
be attentive on
this
and should adopt Neighborhood so these activities can be reduced and we should learn self-defence for are safety .
Therefore
, it is clear that the
problems
caused by overpopulation in urban areas are very serious Yet if
government
and individuals share a collective responsibility
then
it may
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will
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become possible to offer some solution.
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