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In many countries, major cities have become too big and overcrowded. Why is it happened? Give the solution on this problem.

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Nowadays, it is certainly clear that the main places have become enormous and over the amount of population in many countries.
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 essay will discuss the causes and solutions to
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 issue,
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 give an example to support my answer to the best.
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 with, many families tend to prefer to live in metropolises
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 of rural areas. There are a variety of causes of the problem.
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 of all, urban
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 had a variety of workplaces that make people choose to live in and can gain a profit as well.
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, urban
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 had great transportation that offers people to travel around anywhere they want and go to work by public transport which is very convenient.
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, the following above had made overcrowded in the main
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 problem.
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, there are several solutions to
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, the government need to take any action on
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 issue by creating the legal to make people live in a rural area more.
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, the government should encourage transportation all over the country. In conclusion, as we can see, the overcrowded in main
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 is a serious problem that cannot solve in a short time period.
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, I believed that it is possible to solve it in a few years with the solutions mentioned above. The examples mentioned had support by my answer to the best.
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