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Some Experts Believe That It Is Better For Children To Begin Learning A Foreign Language At Primary School Rather Than Secondary School.

#experts #children #language #school
It is said that take in
foreign
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a foreign
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language
in
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 younger age at primary
school
 would be more beneficial compare with starting it at secondary
school
. I think the benefits of learning another
language
 sooner are more than the drawbacks. Learning
foreign
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language
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 early age brings more positive impact for children. It is undeniable fact that whatever children
be
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 younger, the power of learning is greater because their mind is fresh.
Therefore
, they would take in another
language
 quickly.
For instance
, when a kid is trained in
first
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 years of
school
, she or he is more likely to speak
this
language
 not only better but
also
 earlier rather than his or her peers who learn
this
 skill in secondary
school
.
Moreover
, primary schools' timetable is more flexible to allocate specific time for
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the student
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student
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students
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 to teach them a
language
 through play. In
this
 way,
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 can maintain learners' enthusiasm and progress. All in all, learning other languages
subsequently
 will be easier for individuals in future and they can take advantage of it in their educational and professional life in order to be familiar with cultural diversity.
On the other hand
, as primary
school
 is the
first
years
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 of student’s education, learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
 might be
arduas
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arduous
 for them.
Hence
, they may get confused and
this
 probably has
impact
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an impact
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 on other
school
 lessons
such
 as
math
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maths
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, physics and science which are more indispensable in education systems.
In addition
, some of the primary
school
 teachers may lack
of
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language
 teaching experience that
it
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 leads to unproper training. By the way of conclusion, I believe early exposure to
language
 learning
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 to fast learning and gain
better
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 understanding of different cultures so that the advantages outweigh its disadvantages and the weakness of
this
 statement could be solved by providing well-rounded analyses to find cutting-edge methods.
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