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Even though globalization affects the world's economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. Discuss.

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decade
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, there has been a common argument exist in relation to how transnational influences the worldwide profitable. While some believe that globalism has boosted dramatically economic opportunities around the world, others think that it has caused detrimental results
instead
.
However
, I believed that it produces great overate
though
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jurisdiction
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 should have paid more attention to the negative outcome. On the one hand, modernity has a huge impact on our daily life.
Firstly
, it allows developing
countries
 to catch up with industrialized nations through having a
strength
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 interaction with developed
countries
 in
transportation
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 field.
For instance
, Viet Nam nowadays has
such
 an important position with giant international corporations in economic fields which make Vietnamese production available worldwide due to the quality and effective exportation.
Besides
 that,
globalized
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 economy
advance
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 modern technology which
become
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 more productive in manufacturing huge amount of production in a
second
 with all skills
are
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 utilized.
As a result
,
this
 advantage
become
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 one of the major
aspect
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 in country’s economic growth.
On the other hand
, small business and medium scale establishments may have to close down due to the competition with multinational companies which will lead to
such
 a terrible deterioration to the whole profit of the country.
Consequently
, globalization
also
lead
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 to the problem of exploitation which
commonly seen
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 in
countries
 where
labor
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 and tax are cheap and
this
 is the opportunity to cause devastating case on a
countries
 heritage site and tradition.
As a result
, the local product might have
replaced
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 by many luxury international brands and that result in
such
 long-term effects on
country’s
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 traditional goods. In conclusion,
although
 there are many cons
in
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this
 trend, I believe that the pros are more emergent. As long as the bond between
countries
 in
global
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 village is strong, the trend will represent in
such
 an optimistic way and the prospect of conflicts will be declined which would present a better world to the upcoming generations.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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