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Some people today believe that the world’s increase in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Other people believe that world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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The populace of the world is ever-growing. Some
people
 believe that
this
 increase has created an unsustainable situation and that it will lead to a global crisis. Other
society
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 believe that only through an increasing community can the world’s economy and society develop.
This
people
 increase is not constant around the world; the public is undergoing significant growth especially in less developed regions, and the continent of Africa is predicted to undergo the highest increase. Many
people
 living in these less developed
countries
 frequently face shortages,
such
 as water, food, heating, cooking fuel and medicines, and
people
 have to live in substandard living conditions by western standards. With more inhabitants, these difficulties will become exacerbated and helping these
countries
 might
also
 create strain on the resources and economies of other
countries
.
On the other hand
, many
countries
 are unable to reach their economic potential due to a lack of skilled workforces. For these ,
countries
 a growing population can mean a stronger economy and, due to that, a better standard of living. Growing populations can
also
 lead to the growing demand for goods, allowing economies to expand. The problem is,
however
, that
countries
 that are in need of labour forces and increasing demand are already the more developed
countries
 and they meet some of these needs by immigration and exporting goods. In conclusion, while certain areas of the world are in need of larger workforces to develop their economies, the continuously increasing population could potentially lead to a crisis within
countries
 that already struggle to provide for their inhabitants.
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