Students should pay the full cost of their own study because university education benefits individual rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #cost #study #university #education #society

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level

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of education should

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privately by an individual rather than the public fund because the outcome is only beneficial to a single

person

instead

of the whole community.

However

, I totally disagree and the reason will

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in the upcoming paragraph.

First

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and foremost reason is that when a

person

from a community

recieve

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receives

receive

a higher

institiute

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institute

qualification

this

person

can help

develope

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develop

the area in many

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This

kind of action not only increase the living standard of a single

person

and

its

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their

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family but

also

help increase the social standard for the whole society. There are

also

many

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, healthcare

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and many other

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from different

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of life that grew up in the close

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circle that help build the area that they grew up. A doctor who graduated medical school

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with the finical aid from

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society will likely help in the improvement of the healthcare

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sector of that region. For a country, town, city or village to develop the main important component to obtain is educated

people

with different

qualification

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qualifications

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. Having educated

people

not only develop the area but

also

decrease the crime rate and make the hood safer place to live in the reason is

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the majority of the

people

having study job there is no need to turn to

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of crime to make the living. To sum

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rather than seeing other

people

achievement as an individual and helping out in a way you kind without expecting another in return is

morally

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a morally

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right and humane gesture that everyone should do.

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2Word repetition
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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Students should pay the full cost of their own study because university education benefits individual rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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