Young people are leaving their homes frome rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantage?

High employment rates are so high nowadays, especially in
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rural
area
. Young
people
from
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rural
areas
are willing to move and look for more opportunities in the big
cities
, whether to work or to study. There are
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reasons behind
this
but in my opinion, I totally agree young
people
should explore
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world more and learn as much as they can in the big
cities
.
Firstly
, every
goverment
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government
is willing to invest more resources and budget into
emplyement
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employment
and educational
area
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areas
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in their big
cities
. In general, big
cities
have a higher population rate compares to
the
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rural
areas
. More jobs are required
people
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to work and more
opportunties
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opportunities
have been created for
people
. Due to
this
, more young
people
from rural
areas
are willing to move from their
home
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homes
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to look for more
opportunuties
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opportunities
in the big
cities
.
Besides
, rural
areas
can only offer young
people
very limited resources in terms of training or higher education after they leave school.
Secondly
, not only
employement
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employment
and educational
area
government willing to invest. Government is
also
willing to invest in
technological
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the technological
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area
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areas
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. Young
people
can be able to learn all the latest
advance
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technology compares to the
people
who live in the rural
area
. All the big companies like Google, Yahoo and Microsoft have offices in all the big
cities
and have invested millions
to
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their product development. The most recent
nationally
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survey was done by
University
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the University
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of South Australia that almost 75% of teens and young adults are all obsessed with technology especially they are
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fascination
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of
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electronic games.
However
,
hosuing
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housing
hosting
is one of the big problems in big
cities
and young
people
are
are
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finding themselves struggling to pay bills and feed their families. We can see some of the potential impacts of housing issues on mental health and
people
well being. In conclusion, young
people
should explore
outside
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world more and it is no harm to leave home from rural
ares
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areas
to study or work in the
cities
.
On the other hand
,
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government
governement
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should provide more resources
on
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education and create more job
opportuntuies
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opportunities
in rural
areas
so that everyone should have
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opportunity
opportunty
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the opportunty
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to decide where they want to live or
stduy
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study
day
.
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