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Now a day many people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive and a negative development?

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In
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 era, Preference for
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 is seen to be proliferating. In recent times, many
people
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 are interested in purchasing Clothes, Cars and Other
products
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 of eminent
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 could be mainly done either to maintain social status in
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society
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 or one is influenced by an external source. In my opinion, I believe that
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 change can have various negative effects on
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. One of the main cons of
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 wanting to buy famous
brands
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products
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 is that
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 leads to wastage of
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.
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,
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products
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 can be inexorbident which may not be affordable for Everyone. Rather than spending huge
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 on these
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,
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 money could be used for better
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 of life or for
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social causes.
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, under the influence
people
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 tend to believe that buying renowned
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 is the key to their Happiness.
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,
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 could lead them to buy
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thing
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 they are not really fond
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 published in ‘THE TIMES’ stated that “ Reason behind 23% of the
people
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people
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wearing brand is to go with the latest trend and to form a social status. Another negative aspect to consider is that children tend to
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pester
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 their parents to buy expensive
brands
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products
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 and other irrelevant items.
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 could be a financial burden on the parents.
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,
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 release upgraded
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 more often with minor changes results in
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to
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not only buy more unwanted trendy items by following other
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 in the
society
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 but
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 spending huge money in order to impress
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 in the
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 In conclusion, I believe that
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 getting inclined towards buying brand
products
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 can have
plethorea
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 of negative effects on the
society
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Conspicuous consumption
  • Brand loyalty
  • Elitism
  • Marketing strategies
  • Consumer psychology
  • Purchase behavior
  • Economic stratification
  • Sustainability
  • Luxury goods
  • Peer influence
  • Global marketing
  • Brand equity
  • Materialistic values
  • Status symbol
  • Quality perception
  • Investment piece
  • Influencer culture
  • Exclusivity
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