The death penalty is best way to control and reduce serious crime. To what extent do you agree?

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Some

people

believe that capital punishment is no humane way for execution, even if that person has committed a grave offence. Others think that the extreme penalty is necessary to keep the security system efficient in society. Personally, I believe that capital punishment is a necessary evil for a grave offence.

This

essay will support my opinion with some reasons and examples.

Firstly

, there are many evil

people

who commit sins

which

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that

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are not forgivable.

People

who commit these types of sins or

crimes

must be expelled from the premises and

also

the

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from the

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community around the world.

For example

, there are many

people

who kidnap and kill

the

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apply

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children,women or old

people

for

there

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their

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benefits

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benefit

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. I believe that all the laws abided

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by by

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the government are responsible for the peace in the particular country. These laws made are for

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women

women's

womens

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women

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children

children's

childrens

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children

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or old citizens living. To avoid

such

crimes

the government must increase the capital

punishements

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punishments

punishment

which are there.

For

instance

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giving imprisonment for 10 years or life imprisonment is not enough

instead

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apply

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these they may give death penalties

such

as injecting venom or hang to death. These

people

who do sins must get very

threating

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threatening

punishments so that they get some learning from what they do. These all capital

punishements

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punishments

punishment

must be cost-effective so that it is cheap and reasonable to spend money on

this

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these

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crimes

. In conclusion, the death penalty is the only

one

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apply

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option in the country or world to reduce the

crimes

and maniacs who try to attempt these

threating

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threats

threatening

and death-taking

crimes

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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258 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

capital punishment
deterrent effect
sense of justice
closure
wrongful execution
life imprisonment
moral and ethical considerations
rehabilitation
financial and resource implications
desensitize
socio-economic biases
racial biases
retribution
crime rate
judicial system

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