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Young people today are better qualified than they were in the past. Some people argue that this is because competition for jobs is greater than it used to be. Others say that people only continue their education because the opportunities exist for them to do so. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #competition #jobs #education #opportunities
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The given diagram illustrates the process of producing
leather
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 products. It is obvious that there are 11 stages in
this
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 mechanism starting with drying animal skin and culminating with stocking in stores. As can be seen from the diagram, Animal skin is dried and
then
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 transported to a
leather
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 factory. The main stages of producing
leather
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 goods start from here where
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, the transported
leather
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 is washed with solvation of water and lime and after
that
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 it is soaked in lime,
then
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 the flattening process starts with two big round rollers which flatten the
leather
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. Out of the remaining steps, again, the flattened
leather
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 is put in the solvation of tannin which contains water and vegetable matter and after
that
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 the
leather
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 is polished to become ready to be transported to the factory again. The
last
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 stage is stocking the products in
leather
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 shops where people can choose and buy them.
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