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The line graph illustrates the fish and three different kinds of
meat
 consumed in Europe from 1979 to 2004. Units are in grams per person per week against each
year
. Overall, consumption of fish was the same each
year
, and drastic reduction can be observed over
the
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time on the consumption of lamb and
beef
 while increasing consumed
chicken
. The most favourite
meat
 in the
year
 1979 was
beef
, and
chicken
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 was not
a favourite
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favourite meat
a slice of favourite meat
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meat
 compared to
beef
 and lamb in the same
year
 with a little less than 150 grams per week by a person.
Beef
 could be able
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become the most consumed
meat
 in 1989 before falling dramatically up to 100 grams. Lam followed the same pattern with a start of 150 g in 1979 and approximately 60 g in 2004. In 2004,
chicken
 became the most consumed
meat
 and around 250g per week was consumed by an average person.
Chicken
also
 had an increasing trend till 1989 before it falls slightly greater than the value in 1984.
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