Some people believe that there should b fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today's world,
crime
and
punishment
(s) associated
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these
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this crime
these crimes
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crime
is a controversial issue. Many believe that there should be fixed
punishments
for each type of
crime
while others believe that factors
such
as
circumstances
and
motivation
should be accounted
when
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for when
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deciding on the
punishment
.
Firstly
,
by
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having fixed
punishments
has its own advantages.
By having
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knowledge of
punishment
in advance would discourage many people to commit these crimes,
hence
, resulting in reducing
crime
rates.
In addition
,
law
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the law
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and order system would be simplified . Processing times of court trials and cases would be reduced dramatically since there are pre-defined
punishments
.
However
, it is obvious that people who commit crimes due to certain
circumstances
and
motivation
cannot be treated in
similar
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a similar
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manner to criminals ;
such
as , a murder committed as an act of
self-defense
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self-defence
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is not
same
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the same
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as a murder committed in order to terrorise people.
Similarly
, a father robbing a shop to save her daughter life at
hospital
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is definitely not
same
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the same
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as a professional thief robbing a bank.
Also
,
law
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the law
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and order system can be deemed fairer in
this
arrangement as it takes
circumstances
and
motivation
into the account.
Finally
,
in
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either
way
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,way
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there are pros and cons associated
to
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it. In my view,
by
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apply
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having fixed
punishments
would help to reduce
crime
,
however
,
crime
conducted due to certain
circumstances
and
motivation
should
also
be considered while deciding on
punishment
such
as
act
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an act
the act
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of
self-defense
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self-defence
show examples
.
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