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One way to reduce the problem of traffic congestion is by increasing the tax on private vehicles. Do you think this is a feasible solution?

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 of problems
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 urban citizens, traffic is the most troublesome issue faced by them in their routine daily life. Some
people
 believe that there is no other way except rising the taxation on individual bikes and cars to retrench the soaring number of vehicles on roads.
However
, I personally do not agree with
this
 opinion.
Firstly
, I will discuss why levying additional cess on nonpublic conveyances will not serve the purpose followed by ways to solve
this
 annoying perplexity.
To begin
 with, augmenting tax on
people
's own mode of transport will fail to decrease rush on the city roads.
This
 stems from the fact that many latest surveys published by reputed organisations stated that the number of
people
 desiring to have their separate mode of transport is on a constant rise and on it's way to peak
inspite
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in spite
 of the prices of
four wheelers
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 that have already been hiked up by companies owing to
scarcity
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the scarcity
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 of raw materials.
This
 can be attributed to fears instilled by
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 COVID pandemic which firmly reinstated the need for social distancing and avoiding gatherings.
Moreover
,
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 of buses and trains because of lockdowns issued by
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further
 contributed to the increasing demand. To illustrate, Hyundai India has reported a massive boom in their business in the current year due to
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 in customers mindset's and opinions.
Thus
,
people
 who obviously treat health as
utmost
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 priority would not hesitate to buy
new
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 despite escalating prices and customs duty.
On the other hand
,
instead
 of excess fees, many other measures can be implemented to effectively wane
this
 predicament. One of them is to develop parallel and link roadways by enhancing the existing infrastructure.
This
 ultimately would result in
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a redistribution
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 of motor cars resulting in reduced congestion.
For example
, Hyderabad witnessed a significant decline in
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 of stagnation after improving
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 network and laying contemporary flyovers.
In addition
 to
this
, several other means like
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 of even and odd number
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 in Delhi
also
 proved fruitful.
Hence
, it is up to the local conditions to choose which technology suits
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 best. In conclusion,
instead
 of imposing
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 burden on the masses,
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lawmakers
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law makers
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lawmakers
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 and executives should consider state-of-the-art ideas to downsize
this
 arduous plight.
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