Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A teenager can learn a lot through working in the
community
in their free
time
. Many people believe that
this
can be advantageous to the
community
and the children because services like picking up garbage, helping elders can teach teenagers to keep the place clean and tidy, and to respects
their
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their
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elder. I believe ,
however
, that they should be paid for their
work
and
time
rather than doing
for
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it for
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free.
Childrens
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Children's
do have free
time
compared to adults. When
this
time
is
utilsed
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utilised
in a right manner and they are paid, it can motivate them to participate in
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activities.
In other words
, knowing that they will earn through their hard
work
with
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them to
paricipate
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participate
voluntilarity
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voluntarily
without even have to force them.
For instance
, if a teenager
want
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to buy pair of sports shoes, he will
work
in the
community
and earn that money rather than asking
parents
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his parents
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.
However
, if they are asked to just
work
for free, they might end up not
perofrming
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performing
the tasks really well. They will find reasons to avoid performing services to the
community
. They can be forced to do the job, but the outcome might
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turnout
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to be poor.
Therefore
, it should be
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compulsory
to pay, when they are working in their leisure
time
. In conclusion,
teenages
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teenagers
should be paid for working in the
community
as it will motivate them.
In addition
,
there
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their
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wont
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be
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any need to force them because they will
voluntrialy
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voluntarily
participate considering the reward they will earn.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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